Ahh, the first shell drawing. It didn't turn out that well as far as I'm concerned. In the group critique we decided that there were a few things that could be improved. For starters, the diagonal axis could be a little more dramatic, this one isn't bad but it could be better. Another thing that was mentioned was the usage of the page. My shell could definitely have been a tad bit bigger. As far as outlining goes, it's not the worst but there are some really heavy lines on the front end of the shell that really pop out and scream outline. Something else that can be improved on is the atmospheric perspective, the back of the shell should show less detail to make it look more convincing. It shows the shape well but there should be fewer and lighter lines in the back. As for the good things that appear in my scribble, the lines do a fair job at describing the form of the shell and the contour lines are nice and varied, no two lines are exactly alike.
I think that your long axis is done nicely, but i do know they there are angles with the shell that can be pushed forward. If you see mine it is also at an angle like youre. The part that i really enjoy the most would be the top of the shell. It looks so complicated yet, it also looks like there wasnt many mistakes. you must have observed it very closely. The contour lines are really lovely, with the way they show the rises, and falls of the shells movement. It does seem like the lines could be varied with different line weights, but you know, im one to talk because i have the same issue! we'll get it =) i cant wait to see your india inked shell. i bet with a more dramatic angle, line weights and the ink wash it will be beautiful =)
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